tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3409738007153494139.post4438046263554275716..comments2023-08-29T12:13:36.571+01:00Comments on A Day Dreamer's World: Living like a Symphony(Short Story)Anonymoushttp://www.blogger.com/profile/13083834574407855479noreply@blogger.comBlogger1125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3409738007153494139.post-11879316244153613792013-02-08T22:39:31.413+00:002013-02-08T22:39:31.413+00:00Hi Sophie!
Wow, I'm stunned. Your use of ima...Hi Sophie!<br /> Wow, I'm stunned. Your use of imagery is brilliant! This is beautiful writing, and mysterious as well. Your vagueness to the situation, and specificity to sense-oriented details is a great combination!<br /> There's a minor tense issue on the first sentence "The music played" which is in past-tense while the rest is in present. Also, did you meant to put "Except" instead of "Accept" in your third paragraph?<br /><br />Amazing writing! Keep it up!<br />-KirthiKirthihttps://www.blogger.com/profile/10857145616217476440noreply@blogger.com